The Dead Girl Who Speaks
Death has always had a voice in horror fiction. Sometimes it whispers from the walls (The Turn of the Screw), sometimes it narrates its own story (The Lovely Bones). The “dead narrator” trope is powerful because it removes safety—if the storyteller can die, so can anyone.
The trick isn’t just letting the dead talk. It’s giving them something new to say.
- Why it works: As Shirley Jackson showed in The Haunting of Hill House, horror often exists between what’s real and what’s remembered. The dead narrator gives that liminal space a voice—part witness, part warning. The reader becomes complicit in haunting themselves.
- How to do it: Treat the afterlife as ordinary. Give it texture, flaws, temperature. Let your ghost stub her toe or taste the metal of her own absence. Make it familiar enough that the impossible feels plausible.
Do
Use physical or sensory detail to ground the supernatural.
Focus on emotion over explanation.
Avoid
Long expository descriptions of “how death works.”
Don’t give the narrator omniscience, as mystery dies when logic takes over.
From My Work
“On December 10—just thirteen days before my sixteenth birthday—I died.”
In The Death of Me, Katie’s voice isn’t tragic—it’s procedural. She’s not mourning; she’s reporting. That neutrality turns death into a setting instead of an ending.
The Isolated Setting
Whether it’s a mansion on a hill or a bunker after the fall, isolation magnifies fear. It strips away distraction and forces characters to confront themselves.
From Shirley Jackson’s Hill House to Stephen King’s The Shining, isolation isn’t about ghosts—it’s about amplification. The walls echo what’s already inside.
- Why it works: Horror thrives on pressure. Remove exits, reduce light, and the mind becomes its own antagonist. Readers know the layout by heart—yet dread what’s hiding in the corners.
- How to do it: Build geography like a character. Every creaking floorboard, every sealed window should reveal something about the people trapped within. When readers know the map, every deviation feels like a betrayal.
Do
Let environment mirror emotion.
Use sensory repetition to create claustrophobia.
Avoid
Treating setting as a backdrop.
Don’t over-describe. Leave gaps for the reader to fill.
From My Work
“The man jolted upright, spine flexing with a terrible crack… He opened his mouth and screamed—wet and garbled.”
In Salt & Bone, confinement isn’t architectural—it’s biological. The horror of infection mirrors the suffocation of space.
The Deal with Death
Every era has its version of Faust. From Goethe’s scholar to Victor LaValle’s tragic survivors, the bargain-with-death trope endures because it’s logical. When grief becomes unbearable, compromise feels humane.
- Why it works: Readers don’t fear damnation—they fear regret. The moral horror of a bad deal hits harder when the motive is love. As Tananarive Due wrote in Ghost Summer, “The scariest bargains are the ones we would almost make.”
- How to do it: Make the choice inevitable. Let readers sympathize with the logic, even as they dread the outcome. The stronger the justification, the sharper the fall.
Do
Make the temptation emotional, not transactional.
Use dialogue to reveal self-deception.
Avoid
Depicting the bargain as instantaneous.
Painting death as the obvious villain won’t garner any points with your readers. They should WANT to hate them.
From My Work
“He told me my parents were going to kill themselves. He said he could make it so they wouldn’t suffer.”
In The Death of Me, Katie would never sell her soul for power—but she’d to it for mercy. That’s what makes it horrifying.
The Haunted Protector
The most dangerous people in horror are the ones who think they’re saving you. Mentor figures, priests, guardians—when protection becomes control, trust curdles into terror.
- Why it works: Tananarive Due and Stephen King both explore this inversion: saviors as threats. In Doctor Sleep, Danny Torrance inherits his father’s addictions while trying to protect others from theirs. The horror lies in repetition—the kindness that becomes a curse.
- How to do it: Start with compassion. Show the protector doing something genuinely good, then twist it. The closer their logic is to love, the more painful their corruption.
Do
Make the betrayal gradual.
Tie their protection to obsession or belief.
Avoid
Instant villain reveals.
Don’t treat the mentorship as a plot convenience. It should feel real.
From My Work
“He insisted I go with him… He buckled himself in and started the car. ‘I don’t want your soul, Katie. I’m here to protect you.’”
In The Death of Me, this line reads as kindness until the reader realizes she can’t leave. That inversion is where the fear lives.
The Monster Inside
Body horror endures because it isn’t about bodies—it’s about identity. From Kafka’s Metamorphosis to Jeff VanderMeer’s Annihilation, transformation stories force us to confront what’s beneath our skin.
- Why it works: The human body is unreliable. It sweats, bleeds, betrays. Horror weaponizes that instability, turning familiar sensations into evidence of something alien. Readers feel it before they understand it.
- How to do it: Keep it intimate. Describe what transformation feels like, not what it looks like. Use rhythm and breath—the shortness of sentences can mimic panic.
Do
Fuse the external and internal (e.g., “He felt the scream before he heard it”).
Use texture over gore.
Avoid
Explaining cause or cure.
Don’t mutation as spectacle. Make it slow, horrifying, and engaging.
From My Work
“Pressure built in my head, tight and splitting, like someone was cranking a vice down on my temples. Could feel it in my teeth, in my jaw, like they were gonna crack. The heat in my chest bloomed, boiling over, flushing down to my toes, fingers, hips. A white-hot spear running through my heart.”
In Salt & Bone: Ashes, Jack suffers from addiction, turning him into the monster he always feared.
The False Salvation
Sometimes the scariest moment in horror is the rescue that comes too soon. Safety promised, then denied.
From The Mist to The Others, false salvation gives readers hope just long enough to shatter it. It’s cruelty disguised as mercy.
- Why it works: Relief heightens horror. When tension releases, readers exhale—then the floor drops out. It’s emotional whiplash, and it sticks.
- How to do it: End a scene on safety that doesn’t feel earned. Then reveal why. Let the comfort decay naturally.
Do
Use familiar comforts (family, faith, light) as the twist.
Keep the reveal grounded—too much spectacle ruins credibility.
Avoid
Repeating the twist multiple times.
One betrayal is memorable; more feel cheap. And avoid making the rescuer overtly evil.
From My Work
“I sat down in the dirt. Shotgun across my lap. Heart hammering so loud it filled my ears… I couldn’t feel my hands.”
In Salt & Bone, survival isn’t safety. Silence can be more terrifying than screams.
The Quiet Ending
Horror rarely ends with closure. It ends with breath. After the monster is gone—or becomes you—silence remains.
As Carmen Maria Machado shows in Her Body and Other Parties, quiet endings turn fear into echo. What’s unsaid lingers longer than any scream.
- Why it works: Stillness lets dread ferment. The mind fills the silence with whatever it fears most. In a genre built on noise, restraint becomes rebellion.
- How to do it: Strip the ending to its bones. One sensory detail. One line that contradicts comfort. End where life continues—but uneasily.
Do
End on implication, not explanation.
Let rhythm carry the final beat.
Avoid
Tying every thread.
Try not to overstate the theme.
From My Work
“Nothing mattered anymore. I was going to die, and my parents were going to hurt. No matter what I did… nothing would prepare them.”
In The Death of Me, Katie’s resignation isn’t peace—it’s paralysis. The story ends, but her voice doesn’t. That’s the real haunting.
Final Thoughts
Tropes endure because they’re evolution, not repetition.
Readers crave recognition, then subversion.
The next time you write a haunted house, a monster, a bargain—don’t ask how to avoid the trope. Ask why it still scares us. Then let that fear speak in your own language.
Extras
- Buy The Death of Me (Amazon)
- Read more about The Death Series
- Read about Salt & Bone (WIP)
- Sign up for the newsletter to get weekly tips
- The Turn of the Screw by Henry James
- The Lovely Bones by Alice Sebold
- The Shining by Stephen King
- The Haunting of Hill House by Shirley Jackson
- Faust by Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
- Ghost Summer by Tananarive Due
- Doctor Sleep by Stephen King
- Metamorphosis by Franz Kafka
- Annihilation by Jeff VanderMeer
- The Mist by Stephen King
- The Others (Wikipedia)
- Her Body and Other Parties by Carmen Maria Machado